S.C. recall past events
use personal pronouns
has an introduction
has conclusion
written in past tense
Tells when where why who
Connectives
nouns
adjectives
verbs
Day1 Tramp cooked meal night walk
Day2 swimming loop track fire abl art burma trail
Day 3 1st activity day hunting bomb fire swimming
Day4 activity day 2 spot light concert
Day five scan=venger hunt HOME!!!!
Wednesday 14 September 2011
W.A.L.T.To follow the featuresmmmof a recount writing
A recount retails past order that occouried. Good to see that you have used all the language features that you were asked to use. Funny little twist at the end.. :) nice use of alliteration "shadow Stealer".
next learning step Watch your spelling, this should be all correctly checked before adding stuff to your wiki! Work on using the language features more effectively, for example, "he jumped like he had just won lotto". If he had really heard his lollie packet would he have jumped around like he won lotto? how would jumping around like you won lotto sound and be like? would it be the same sort of jumping? Think about this when you are writing.
S.C. recall past events
use personal pronouns
has an introduction
has conclusion
written in past tense
Tells when where why who
Connectives
nouns
adjectives
verbs
Day1 Tramp cooked meal night walk
Day2 swimming loop track fire abl art burma trail
Day 3 1st activity day hunting bomb fire swimming
Day4 activity day 2 spot light concert
Day five scan=venger hunt HOME!!!!
Wednesday 14 September 2011
W.A.L.T.To follow the featuresmmmof a recount writing
A recount retails past order that occouried.
Good to see that you have used all the language features that you were asked to use. Funny little twist at the end.. :) nice use of alliteration "shadow Stealer".
next learning step
Watch your spelling, this should be all correctly checked before adding stuff to your wiki!
Work on using the language features more effectively, for example, "he jumped like he had just won lotto". If he had really heard his lollie packet would he have jumped around like he won lotto? how would jumping around like you won lotto sound and be like? would it be the same sort of jumping? Think about this when you are writing.
Miss Connor